Slowly, The fish swam across the ocean The majestic creature glided gracefully through the perfect, azure waters. Its colors glowed under the water, its scales shined and its eyes sparkled moving its small fin back and front looking behind him every two seconds acting like this is something or someone that he is looking for. Is he looking for his family or his friend? He looked so lonely in the darkness of the ocean he looked scared in the distance he so something big it was a big shadow he got scared a panicked he started to swim fast but his fins were to small so he tried again but with all his might and off he went the sand flew up and the rock bowed he hided behind a coral and the sea weed trying to hide himself then the mystery creature went away then the fish slowly moved away from the coral and the sea weed with a frightened face.
Kia ora Fahtima, my name is Milo from room 25. This was a really cool story because it has lots of correct punctuation. I liked the details and it was really cool. I remember when I made a story like this too. Maybe next time you could introduce yourself to your audience and greet them to make them more intrigued. Also you could make a catchy title. Do you enjoy writing? Blog ya later!
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